Spring Break
I went to Rhode Island by myself. It was boring to fly somewhere by yourself. My father were waiting for me at Rhode Island. They were very happy to see me. We had a good talk about my life and their life. My sister looked exactly like the last time I see her. She didn't grow a lot after christmas. I brought my computer so that if I have nothing to do, I can play on it. "Your height have increased a lot!" my father said. His body told me that he has been exercising. I don't know how is he keeping up. I told him that I miss them a lot especially you. He said:"Is your computer still working? Show us what have you done with it. "Its screen is a little bit dirty but it is ok." "I don't want to waste our money to fix it again." We headed toward our house. I had a good time being with him.
Sounds like a great time. I like the way you wrote this. Good narrative writing style and tone. Please proofread and make corrections. 17/20
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